ENGLISH COURSEWORK PARTLY COMPLETED!!!

i still have to write a commentary, but whatever, above (i.e the next post on this blog) is the monologue that i had to write for english and if anybody with fingers and a semi-intelligent brain is reading this i'd really like some feedback please thankyou :) there is a fabulous comment box below this post, write it there!!! it will reach my eyes shortly after!! i will be appreciative! :D

basically, we had to write a speech or a monologue based on the theme of entrapment and somehow link it to the collector by john fowels. i chose to write about an obese teenage girl who feels trapped inside her own body and wants to be able to, uh, look pretty and stuff (my actual commentary will hopefully be better than this). i've linked it to the collector by saying it uses "increased desperation", the same as how miranda felt when she was trapped by clegg (these are characters in the collector although the second one also happens to be ma dadas last name!! ^_^) we had to give our character a distinctive idiolect, so, hahahah.. urmmmm, i chose to give my character an idiolect consisting of basic sentances and mundane vocabulary because I AM A BIG FAT SLACKER. :D so yes, read the monologue (the next post). I WILL EAT YOUR FEEDBACK, INGEST IT AND LOVE IT INSIDE MY TUMMY.

please read my next post for the monologue itself :D